There is only one criticism, as far as I’m concerned. I did not feel that the suggestive section needed to be included, and there was a choice word at the end that did not need to be included. The story is fine without these elements. But that is just my opinion.
This is a short screenplay with plenty of promise. For the premise alone, it may be worth checking out.
I was sent a copy of this book in exchange for my honest review. I was not financially compensated, and all opinions are 100 percent mine.